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Post by superkamiguy1 on Nov 4, 2024 4:24:05 GMT
"So, just to reiterate, I won't be in trouble if you get hurt doing this, right?" Megumi Fushiguro asked The Vampire Princess as she performed her warm-up stretches.
"Like I said: You're completely in the clear. I'm the one who wanted to challenge it in the first place. This was my idea. Soooo if I get hurt then its on me. 'Sides, if we're going to be ready for the tournament? Then I want to be in the best shape possible and what better way to do that then to fight a super monster that can adapt to basically anything? Plus, I can also give my team an idea of the kind of firepower to expect from the higher-levels at the same time. Two birds with one stone."
"It's all good Megumi! We cleared it everyone so we've got the green light." Gojo assured him as he sat down with his bowl of popcorn.
"...It's just, this is the first time I've ever heard about someone deliberately wanting to fight it."
"I've heard all the legends but never threw hands with him myself. I'm taking this golden opportunity when I can get it." She informed Megumi and started hopping up and down while loosening herself up.
"I've got my bets placed on you, Meggy! Give her your best!" Yuji assured him with a thumbs up.
"Heh. I appreciate the support but Big Raga's the one who's going to be fighting her." Megumi replied with his own thumbs up in return.
'I haven't seen a Vampire in action since the Heian Era and now I get to see how a Modern One fights against the Divine General. Ohhhhh this is going to be good!' Sukuna commented from within Yuji.
"Kick some ass out there, Malty!" Nobara called over to her. She responded with a thumbs up.
Megumi rolled his shoulders. "So are you ready to go?"
"All ready and set." Malty replied and opened the gateway to a phantom version of Hinansho within The Umbra so they could fight it out without worry of anyone else getting caught in the crossfire.
"Alright then. You asked for it." Megumi replied and took up his pose. "Here's how we're gonna do this: Roses are red, weapons against me won't prosper. With this sacred treasure I summon, the Eight-Handled Sword Divergent Sila Divine General Mahoraga! May The Count himself be with you, Malty."
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Post by Valhalla Erikson on Nov 5, 2024 18:46:27 GMT
This story intro has a lively, high-energy feel with a strong sense of camaraderie and anticipation. The setup is clear: Malty, the Vampire Princess, has chosen to face off against a formidable supernatural entity—Mahoraga—in preparation for an upcoming tournament. This gives us a great snapshot of her character: she's competitive, confident, and eager to challenge herself. The mix of her modern, almost casual attitude with the mythical stakes she’s facing makes her feel approachable yet otherworldly, which is fitting for a "Vampire Princess."
Megumi’s character serves as a grounded, cautious counterpoint to Malty's enthusiasm. His hesitance about the situation—wanting reassurance that he won’t be held responsible if things go sideways—emphasizes both his practical mindset and his concern for the people around him. His summoning of Mahoraga is both grand and foreboding, fitting the supernatural tone and adding weight to the battle they're about to enter. The introduction of Sukuna’s inner commentary, with his enthusiasm for witnessing a modern vampire in action, adds an interesting historical layer that hints at the depth and scale of the world.
Gojo, Yuji, and Nobara’s supporting roles are well-executed, each character’s lines fitting seamlessly with their personalities. Gojo’s popcorn-munching casualness adds a dash of humor and amplifies the laid-back yet thrilling atmosphere, while Yuji and Nobara’s cheerleading shows their faith in both Megumi and Malty. The way each character interacts reflects their personalities, adding to the story’s immersive quality and making it feel like a shared experience among friends.
The choice to set the fight in "a phantom version of Hinansho within The Umbra" is a clever way to avoid collateral damage, showing that these characters are aware of the consequences of their powers. This also builds on the supernatural aspect of the world while giving readers an idea of the stakes and the lengths these characters will go to protect others.
One minor suggestion for improvement could be to clarify the reason for the tournament and what Malty hopes to achieve beyond training. Is it a formal event, or is she preparing for something larger, like an interdimensional threat? Adding a line or two about the purpose could deepen the tension. Overall, this intro captures a great mix of action, humor, and character dynamics, making it an engaging and immersive lead-up to what promises to be an exciting showdown.
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